Assignment 2: Assessment Final Comments

Submission is by five physical prints.

In response to my tutor feedback I took the opportunity to re-shoot the first image at a real gathering that the shamanic practitioner attended over the summer.  After his ceremonial work was complete, I posed him as in the original shot but positioned people attending the event in the background.  This gave a sense of him being ready to ‘perform’ to the crowd as discussed in the tutor feedback.  Both images are shown here for comparison:

The five final images were then checked for matching colour balance and exposure before printing on Permajet Matt 240 paper.

Personal notes taken during tutor feedback session

General

• Overall – ‘80% there’, which is good and allows for some polishing in order to be ready for Assessment.
• Add a menu item to show how things cross reference and inspire my developing practice.
• Use a paper journal to develop thoughts and ideas organically.  photo the page and add to blog – no need to duplicate.
• More pictures in blog
• Critically review my work as though i was not familiar with it – it it clear, concise and unambiguous?

Images

• Try reshooting 1. with a real background of a real gathering?  White background a little lost against blog background.
• Play with the order – mask as first shot?
• 100 word intro and more consistent, short, titles.  Give space for interpretation of the images.
• play with arranging small physical proofs to find the right order

Research

• Gillian Wearing – Masks, NPG (booked for 22 March)
• Eggleston – recent exhibition.  Look at how he physically works to decide order and layout of presentation.

(Raw notes retained for archival purposes):

My Tutor’s feedback report can be found here.